My new portfolio: Please give me feedback.(

over 5 years ago from Ray Besiga, Digital Product Designer

  • Davey HollerDavey Holler, over 5 years ago

    I'd look at using a different treatment on the citation for the testimonials. The larger, bolder, and highlighted treatment draws way more attention to the person rather than what they said. I'd reverse the typographic hierarchy there.

    Additionally, you've got some writing that could be improved. You should strive to hit a 7th grade reading level. I live by a tool called Hemingway App. Here's a screenshot of how your paragraph towards the bottom of the page performs.

    Hemingway Screen Shot

    3 points
    • Ray BesigaRay Besiga, over 5 years ago

      Thanks, Davey. I have not used Hemingway app for ages but clearly, I need to get back to it. I will subject all my copy to the test.

      Regarding the testimonials, I will need to think about how to switch that around as the attention is being directed inversely to my intentions.

      0 points